Saturday, August 13, 2011
Short poem. called eyes?
Ignore your first comment. They delight in berating poetry, and used to state so on their profile. While this is short, I do not believe that it lacks depth. The eyes are the window to the soul, and your quatrain illustrates that quite well. The only thing that you should change is the spelling of "threw", the word that you actually want is "Through." Also, if it were my work, I wouldn't end every line on a question. I would combine lines three and four with a comma because "through tears and ruthless dismay" does not stand by itself as a question. All in all though, good poem, short, sweet, to the point.
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